On your blog, write about what you wish you had done differently while you worked on your paper.
If I could go back and do things differently I would certainly zone in on lesson 10, I received my worste grade ever on that lesson, a 70%, any lower would have been a D! I would go back to that lesson and pay closer attentiont to what the instructor was really asking for. I completely missed the point of that lesson and my grades suffered for it.
Another thing that I would do differently...I would pay more attentiont to the corrections my instructor made. I feel like I made a lot of monotonous mistakes.
This course has certainly taught me to pay more attention to detail and instructions, but obviously I will always have room to improve.
Saturday, May 29, 2010
Monday, May 24, 2010
Lesson 13
Journal:
Write about your experience consulting with someone about your writing. 500 words
I turned my paper over to a science teacher with a BA in history and science. For our intents and purposes we'll just call her "Miss Smith". She worked at my school as a teacher's aid and often corrected high school students' papers. So I asked if she would be willing to correct my and then I emailed it to her. While I waited I corrected my paper on my own and crossed my fingers. I was hoping that I wouldn't disappoint her. A few days later she called me on the phone so we could discuss the mistakes, strengths, and weaknesses. She seemed very pleased with my work, which was a relief to me, but there were some errors we had to address.
My WC page had some formatting errors, errors that my UAF instructor had tried to point out earlier but I didn't understand. Miss Smith was able to answer my questions and then I was able to understand my formatting errors. She also pointed out that I had some citing issues in the body of the paper. I was citing my sources, but I wasn't explaining what/who my sources were or how they were significant in supporting my thesis. I spent several hours afterward filling in those blanks.
Miss Smith said that my paper had many strengths and that it had good flow. She was pleased with the lack of plagiarism, which she said had been an issue when she was a teacher on the East Coast. She especially liked the hook in the beginning of my paper; she said the statistics were shocking.
My original plan was to submit my paper to the writing center at UAF, but I have a very strict deadline and I wasn't sure how long it would take the center to correct my paper and then get back to me. So I instead chose someone who I knew would be able to do it quickly.
After we had our telephone meeting she sent an email to my instructor and then also sent me a copy so I could produce proof of consultation pertaining to lesson 13. I received a 98% for lesson 13, my highest score yet! And I have submitted my paper for lesson 14; it's THE BIG paper and I'm hoping for the best. I think I did well, I should be getting at least a B, possibly an A, but we'll see; my instructor sees errors that I may not have caught even if I had read the paper ten times over; she's very good at that.
So, I’ll just finish by saying that it is a very good idea to have papers proof read by other people before submitting them. It really helps with catching the little mistakes (and some of the embarrassing big ones). Not only that, but it helps improve flow, style, and voice. My high school teacher always said, “Good writing is good thinking.” And he was right, but I can add to that list. Good writing equals good grade. Note to self:
Have all important papers and assignments proof read by at least one other person before submitting.
Write about your experience consulting with someone about your writing. 500 words
I turned my paper over to a science teacher with a BA in history and science. For our intents and purposes we'll just call her "Miss Smith". She worked at my school as a teacher's aid and often corrected high school students' papers. So I asked if she would be willing to correct my and then I emailed it to her. While I waited I corrected my paper on my own and crossed my fingers. I was hoping that I wouldn't disappoint her. A few days later she called me on the phone so we could discuss the mistakes, strengths, and weaknesses. She seemed very pleased with my work, which was a relief to me, but there were some errors we had to address.
My WC page had some formatting errors, errors that my UAF instructor had tried to point out earlier but I didn't understand. Miss Smith was able to answer my questions and then I was able to understand my formatting errors. She also pointed out that I had some citing issues in the body of the paper. I was citing my sources, but I wasn't explaining what/who my sources were or how they were significant in supporting my thesis. I spent several hours afterward filling in those blanks.
Miss Smith said that my paper had many strengths and that it had good flow. She was pleased with the lack of plagiarism, which she said had been an issue when she was a teacher on the East Coast. She especially liked the hook in the beginning of my paper; she said the statistics were shocking.
My original plan was to submit my paper to the writing center at UAF, but I have a very strict deadline and I wasn't sure how long it would take the center to correct my paper and then get back to me. So I instead chose someone who I knew would be able to do it quickly.
After we had our telephone meeting she sent an email to my instructor and then also sent me a copy so I could produce proof of consultation pertaining to lesson 13. I received a 98% for lesson 13, my highest score yet! And I have submitted my paper for lesson 14; it's THE BIG paper and I'm hoping for the best. I think I did well, I should be getting at least a B, possibly an A, but we'll see; my instructor sees errors that I may not have caught even if I had read the paper ten times over; she's very good at that.
So, I’ll just finish by saying that it is a very good idea to have papers proof read by other people before submitting them. It really helps with catching the little mistakes (and some of the embarrassing big ones). Not only that, but it helps improve flow, style, and voice. My high school teacher always said, “Good writing is good thinking.” And he was right, but I can add to that list. Good writing equals good grade. Note to self:
Have all important papers and assignments proof read by at least one other person before submitting.
Wednesday, May 19, 2010
Lesson 12
Well it would appear that there is no assignment for lesson 12, so I'll just spout a little about my recent writings. It absolutely crushed me when I received a terrible grade on Lesson 10. I just about melted for the day. My older sister received an A in this class three or four years ago, so it's a sibling rivalry thing, I want an A as well. But I am averaging out to a B. Getting a B wouldn't be so bad, but I know that I'm capable of earning an A, so it's a little bit frustrating when I dip way below the line of my expectations. I received an A on lesson 11, and a B on 12, I don't think there's much chance of pulling an A out of this class, but who knows. Maybe if I'm extra vigilent I can do it...maybe...
Wednesday, April 14, 2010
Lesson #11
1) On your blog, write about your experience summarizing the reading (500 words)
And what an experience it has been! Finding electronic articles for my research paper was a no-brainer, it was very easy. However, since I do not have access to a significant library, finding a non-electronic source proved to be a little more difficult. I browsed through my mother's stash of magazines and none of them related to my research topic (which, by the way, has to do with the effect of the media on its female viewers). I then went "house-hopping" and asked for up-to-date magazines related to my research topic. I finally came across a magazine that had a relevant article. The article did not necessarily agree with my thesis, however, inadvertently, it did support it. I’ve learned that when I’m looking for a particular article to support my thesis, I don’t need to find an article that agrees with me. Opposing views can prove my point just as well. All one needs is an open mind and perseverance. I suppose as these research papers continue, I'll keep running into road blocks and hang ups, but I'll learn how to trouble-shoot that way.
Next year I will not be living in a bush village, I’ll be living in a city where there are several public libraries (and a few private ones). I’m looking forward to all of the tangible research I’ll be able to do there. I’ve only been inside a real library once, and it was a very small one, but it was still a very nice one. Some day I would love to walk inside of a HUGE library and spend an entire day under a pile of books.
So many times I’ve been hung up on writers-block with my head in my hands. My high school teacher tells me just to keep writing. He says as long as I’m writing something I’m not wasting time, so I’ve learned to write whatever pops into my head and it’s really helping me to overcome the helpless feeling of writers-block. It feels awful to be sitting and staring at a blank screen when the deadline clock is ticking away. But I guess that’s part of the adrenalin of writing, isn’t it? Most of us seem to perform better under pressure.
I can definitely say that I’m better at summarizing and annotating articles than I was at the beginning of this course. I’ve learned different ways to approach writing-pieces, such as reading as a believer and a doubter. And I never thought it possible to read and reread the same articles over and over again as much as I have been, but it really does help and it improves my writing. I’m still learning the fine art of it, but it I keep at it than one day I’ll be good at it.
One thing that is confusing me a bit about this particular assignment is my instructor is asking for summaries with a works cited page and copies of the annotated articles. Are summaries and annotations the same thing? If anyone could help me I would greatly appreciate it.
And what an experience it has been! Finding electronic articles for my research paper was a no-brainer, it was very easy. However, since I do not have access to a significant library, finding a non-electronic source proved to be a little more difficult. I browsed through my mother's stash of magazines and none of them related to my research topic (which, by the way, has to do with the effect of the media on its female viewers). I then went "house-hopping" and asked for up-to-date magazines related to my research topic. I finally came across a magazine that had a relevant article. The article did not necessarily agree with my thesis, however, inadvertently, it did support it. I’ve learned that when I’m looking for a particular article to support my thesis, I don’t need to find an article that agrees with me. Opposing views can prove my point just as well. All one needs is an open mind and perseverance. I suppose as these research papers continue, I'll keep running into road blocks and hang ups, but I'll learn how to trouble-shoot that way.
Next year I will not be living in a bush village, I’ll be living in a city where there are several public libraries (and a few private ones). I’m looking forward to all of the tangible research I’ll be able to do there. I’ve only been inside a real library once, and it was a very small one, but it was still a very nice one. Some day I would love to walk inside of a HUGE library and spend an entire day under a pile of books.
So many times I’ve been hung up on writers-block with my head in my hands. My high school teacher tells me just to keep writing. He says as long as I’m writing something I’m not wasting time, so I’ve learned to write whatever pops into my head and it’s really helping me to overcome the helpless feeling of writers-block. It feels awful to be sitting and staring at a blank screen when the deadline clock is ticking away. But I guess that’s part of the adrenalin of writing, isn’t it? Most of us seem to perform better under pressure.
I can definitely say that I’m better at summarizing and annotating articles than I was at the beginning of this course. I’ve learned different ways to approach writing-pieces, such as reading as a believer and a doubter. And I never thought it possible to read and reread the same articles over and over again as much as I have been, but it really does help and it improves my writing. I’m still learning the fine art of it, but it I keep at it than one day I’ll be good at it.
One thing that is confusing me a bit about this particular assignment is my instructor is asking for summaries with a works cited page and copies of the annotated articles. Are summaries and annotations the same thing? If anyone could help me I would greatly appreciate it.
Friday, April 2, 2010
Lesson #10
You have plenty to write about at this point. The subject of the jounal entry on your blog for this lesson is one of your choosing. The entry should be at least 250 words.
Wow, I've learned quite a bit from F111X, and I'm sure the toughest lessons are yet to come. Since I come from an area of limited research sources, I'm having some difficulty finding non electronic, up-to-date sources that back up my claim. I'm going to ask around for some magazines that depict the latest fashion, maybe I'll find some support from those, but it seems like a fashion magazine would oppose my thesis. Which, by the way, my thesis is that the media is having a negative impact on the body image of its viewers.
Most females that the media uses are either very in shape, toned, and sculpted, or they are ridiculously thin. And what I mean by ridiculously thin is that they're so skinny they're unhealthy. All we have to do is mingle with the general population to see that the media isn't promoting the average joe. Somewhere I read that only eight out of a hundred girls have a chance at becoming a model, and only one in a hundred has are capable of being a super-model. Pretty skewed huh?
Models used to be larger than the average person because in the early 1900's only the wealthy could afford to be overweight. More money=more food=more fat. People who were thinner obviously had to work hard to feed themselves and in the process burned off a lot of what they ate. Now the figures have completely switched (no pun intended). Models are incredibly thin and 65% of the population is overweight.
I don't think that these issues are anything that the government should regulate, I like the way The Tale of Despareaux puts it, "You might as well make flies illegal, or sweat, or Monday morning..." I think that these issues are ones that need to be dealt with individually, the people need to step up to the plate (or maybe some need to step away from it)and focus on a healthy way of living, rather than trying to be thin or splurging on food.
Wow, I've learned quite a bit from F111X, and I'm sure the toughest lessons are yet to come. Since I come from an area of limited research sources, I'm having some difficulty finding non electronic, up-to-date sources that back up my claim. I'm going to ask around for some magazines that depict the latest fashion, maybe I'll find some support from those, but it seems like a fashion magazine would oppose my thesis. Which, by the way, my thesis is that the media is having a negative impact on the body image of its viewers.
Most females that the media uses are either very in shape, toned, and sculpted, or they are ridiculously thin. And what I mean by ridiculously thin is that they're so skinny they're unhealthy. All we have to do is mingle with the general population to see that the media isn't promoting the average joe. Somewhere I read that only eight out of a hundred girls have a chance at becoming a model, and only one in a hundred has are capable of being a super-model. Pretty skewed huh?
Models used to be larger than the average person because in the early 1900's only the wealthy could afford to be overweight. More money=more food=more fat. People who were thinner obviously had to work hard to feed themselves and in the process burned off a lot of what they ate. Now the figures have completely switched (no pun intended). Models are incredibly thin and 65% of the population is overweight.
I don't think that these issues are anything that the government should regulate, I like the way The Tale of Despareaux puts it, "You might as well make flies illegal, or sweat, or Monday morning..." I think that these issues are ones that need to be dealt with individually, the people need to step up to the plate (or maybe some need to step away from it)and focus on a healthy way of living, rather than trying to be thin or splurging on food.
Monday, March 29, 2010
Lesson #9
Journal
On your blog, respond to and elaborate on the following prompts:
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What else do I still need to do? (50 words)
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What do I need outside help with? (50-100 words)
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Why am I feeling threatened by this research paper? (50-200 words)
1) I still have a ways to go before I'm finished with this course. The next several lessons will be aimed at writing an effective research and argument paper. I've filled out a calendar that shows me what I need to do and when. I'm still creating effective visual arguments and need to write a rough draft, second draft, and final draft of the research paper. I also need to write a summary of Class in America - 2003. So much work to be done...but I like being challenged, this class has been really good for me.
2) I need outside help with this research paper because it needs to be pretty in depth and Assignment #13 requires me to get outside help on it. Where I live, the local library is half class room and half library. The room is about 300 feet squared and contains mostly books from the 70's and 80's, my village doesn't have a large, up to date library. So I will definitely need outside help tracking down applicable books and magazines for my research topic.
3) I feel threatened by this research paper because it needs to be substantially larger than papers written in the previous lessons, it needs a variety of sources, visual elements are being introduced, and I'm still struggling with MLA format and Works Citing. So, I need to make sure I'm going about this process with tedious care and paying very careful attention.What's scaring me the most is the lack of sources available to me because of where I live.
On your blog, respond to and elaborate on the following prompts:
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What else do I still need to do? (50 words)
*
What do I need outside help with? (50-100 words)
*
Why am I feeling threatened by this research paper? (50-200 words)
1) I still have a ways to go before I'm finished with this course. The next several lessons will be aimed at writing an effective research and argument paper. I've filled out a calendar that shows me what I need to do and when. I'm still creating effective visual arguments and need to write a rough draft, second draft, and final draft of the research paper. I also need to write a summary of Class in America - 2003. So much work to be done...but I like being challenged, this class has been really good for me.
2) I need outside help with this research paper because it needs to be pretty in depth and Assignment #13 requires me to get outside help on it. Where I live, the local library is half class room and half library. The room is about 300 feet squared and contains mostly books from the 70's and 80's, my village doesn't have a large, up to date library. So I will definitely need outside help tracking down applicable books and magazines for my research topic.
3) I feel threatened by this research paper because it needs to be substantially larger than papers written in the previous lessons, it needs a variety of sources, visual elements are being introduced, and I'm still struggling with MLA format and Works Citing. So, I need to make sure I'm going about this process with tedious care and paying very careful attention.What's scaring me the most is the lack of sources available to me because of where I live.
Tuesday, March 23, 2010
WORKING BIBLIOGRAPHY
Bella. "Beauty Bye: 25 Percent of Beauty Ads Fake!" Fab Sugar UK. 29 Mar. 2010. 7 Apr. 2010. http://www.fabsugar.co.uk/25-Percent-Beauty-Ads-Fake-7930023 >
Coontz, Stephanie. “What We Really Miss About the 1950s.” Rereading America. 7th ed. Ed. Colombo, Cullen, Lisle. Bedford/St. Martin’s. 2007. 31-47.
Fox, Kate. "Mirror, mirror." SIRC. 1996. 12 Apr. 2010.http://www.sirc.org/publik/mirror.html >
Gibbons, Sheila. “Teen Magazines Send Girls All The Wrong Messages.” We.News. 29 Oct. 2003. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.womensenews.org/story/uncovering-gender/031029/teen-magazines-send-girls-all-the-wrong-messages >
Goodchild, Sophie. “Dying To Be Thin.” AlterNet. 22 Nov. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.alternet.org/story/44526/ >
Hellmich, Nanci. “Do Thin Models Warp Girls’ Body Image?” USA Today. 26 Sept. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.usatoday.com/news/health/2006-09-25-thin-models_x.htm >
Hutton, Deborah. Vogue: Complete Beauty. New York: Harmony Books, 1985 >
Jennifer L. Derenne, M.D. and Eugene V. Beresin, M.D. "Body Image, Media, and Eating Disorders." June. 2006. May 10. 2010.
< http://ap.psychiatryonline.org/cgi/content/full/30/3/257 >
Kilbourne, Jean. “Beauty…and the Beast of Advertising.” Center for Media Literacy. 2007. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.medialit.org/reading_room/article40.html >
Lowen, Linda. "Women as Sex Objects - Influenced By Sexy Images, Men See Women as Objects." Ask.com. Feb. 23. 2009. 8 Apr. 2010. http://womensissues.about.com/od/intheworkplace/a/MenObjects.htm >
Nauert, Rick. “Media Can Damage Self-Image.” Psych Central. 27 Oct. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010. http://psychcentral.com/news/2006/10/27/media-can-damage-self-image/362.html >
Stasi, Linda. Simply Beautiful. New York: St. Martin’s/Marek, 1983
Webster, Irina. “Media and Influence on Body Image.” Ezine Articles. 6 Sept. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010 http://ezinearticles.com/?Media-And-Influence-On-Women-Body-Image&id=720646 >
Witmen, Denise. "How does the media effect body image in teens?" About.com. 7 Apr. 2010. http://parentingteens.about.com/od/bodyimage/f/media_bodyimage.htm >
"Influence of Media Images Upon Body Esteem." Missouri Western. May 19. 2003. Apr. 12. 2010. http://clearinghouse.missouriwestern.edu/manuscripts/413.php >
"Advertising: It's Everywhere." Media Awareness Network. May 10. 2010.
< http://www.media-awareness.ca/english/parents/marketing/advertising_everywhere.cfm >
"Media is feulling eating disorders, say psychiatrists." BBC. 22 Feb. 2010. 11 May 2010.
< http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/8528443.stm >
"Will Kate Moss Eat Her Words?" CBSNews. 11 May. 2010.
< http://www.cbsnews.com/stories/2009/11/19/entertainment/main5712294.shtml >
"Eating Disorder Statistics." Marisol. 11 May. 2010.
< http://www.mirasol.net/eating-disorders/information/eating-disorder-statistics.php >
Coontz, Stephanie. “What We Really Miss About the 1950s.” Rereading America. 7th ed. Ed. Colombo, Cullen, Lisle. Bedford/St. Martin’s. 2007. 31-47.
Fox, Kate. "Mirror, mirror." SIRC. 1996. 12 Apr. 2010.http://www.sirc.org/publik/mirror.html >
Gibbons, Sheila. “Teen Magazines Send Girls All The Wrong Messages.” We.News. 29 Oct. 2003. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.womensenews.org/story/uncovering-gender/031029/teen-magazines-send-girls-all-the-wrong-messages >
Goodchild, Sophie. “Dying To Be Thin.” AlterNet. 22 Nov. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.alternet.org/story/44526/ >
Hellmich, Nanci. “Do Thin Models Warp Girls’ Body Image?” USA Today. 26 Sept. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.usatoday.com/news/health/2006-09-25-thin-models_x.htm >
Hutton, Deborah. Vogue: Complete Beauty. New York: Harmony Books, 1985 >
Jennifer L. Derenne, M.D. and Eugene V. Beresin, M.D. "Body Image, Media, and Eating Disorders." June. 2006. May 10. 2010.
< http://ap.psychiatryonline.org/cgi/content/full/30/3/257 >
Kilbourne, Jean. “Beauty…and the Beast of Advertising.” Center for Media Literacy. 2007. 25 Mar. 2010. http://www.medialit.org/reading_room/article40.html >
Lowen, Linda. "Women as Sex Objects - Influenced By Sexy Images, Men See Women as Objects." Ask.com. Feb. 23. 2009. 8 Apr. 2010. http://womensissues.about.com/od/intheworkplace/a/MenObjects.htm >
Nauert, Rick. “Media Can Damage Self-Image.” Psych Central. 27 Oct. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010. http://psychcentral.com/news/2006/10/27/media-can-damage-self-image/362.html >
Stasi, Linda. Simply Beautiful. New York: St. Martin’s/Marek, 1983
Webster, Irina. “Media and Influence on Body Image.” Ezine Articles. 6 Sept. 2006. 25 Mar. 2010 http://ezinearticles.com/?Media-And-Influence-On-Women-Body-Image&id=720646 >
Witmen, Denise. "How does the media effect body image in teens?" About.com. 7 Apr. 2010. http://parentingteens.about.com/od/bodyimage/f/media_bodyimage.htm >
"Influence of Media Images Upon Body Esteem." Missouri Western. May 19. 2003. Apr. 12. 2010. http://clearinghouse.missouriwestern.edu/manuscripts/413.php >
"Advertising: It's Everywhere." Media Awareness Network. May 10. 2010.
< http://www.media-awareness.ca/english/parents/marketing/advertising_everywhere.cfm >
"Media is feulling eating disorders, say psychiatrists." BBC. 22 Feb. 2010. 11 May 2010.
< http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/8528443.stm >
"Will Kate Moss Eat Her Words?" CBSNews. 11 May. 2010.
< http://www.cbsnews.com/stories/2009/11/19/entertainment/main5712294.shtml >
"Eating Disorder Statistics." Marisol. 11 May. 2010.
< http://www.mirasol.net/eating-disorders/information/eating-disorder-statistics.php >
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